Thanks for the offers of Red Bull but I'll pass. lol I think I'm doing just fine as is. (Though I used to write a lot faster when I had sugar!)
Oh, I did this a while ago, I forgot to post it. This is Cheetahra from Agnosta. (I don't remember what generation she is) She is in the current time period. (Irons)
I have roughed out a lot of the characters. (I even accidently did 2 versions of Sindri!) I'll put them in scenes and render them later. (rendering takes hours and I want to write!)
Anyway, I just (a few minutes ago) gave Minion Mike the latest BL snippet. Here are both in 1 dollop. The following is RAW. I did a quicky spell check but none of the betas have fact checked it. (Sorry about the formatting)
ACT 1
Chapter 1
Lieutenant
Commander Ssri'allth, Naga captain of the Arboth Yris'ka'th
looked around the bridge of his shiny new command with an air of
approval. They still had some rough edges but they were getting
there. He wasn't at all sure about the hyperdrive, they had yet to do
a full jump but he was confident his new crew could handle whatever
problems were thrown their way.
Not
bad for a former midshipman time lost. He'd been sleeping the sleep
of ages on the derelict liner White Star before Firefly
had rescued him and the others. He'd taken a few positions, winding
his way up the chain of command to be the XO of Wendigo before
taking on his beloved Hecate as
skipper.
Now
his most recent transfer was again onward and upward. He had been
transferred to newly
built Arboth
class destroyer, the first named after a Naga hero. Commander
Yris'ka'th
had distinguished himself during the Xeno war. He'd fought to defend
Malta, one of the Navy's bases that had been handling the refugee
crisis. He'd taken on a Xeno capital ship squadron with only a jury
rigged squadron of small ships to back his Arboth class destroyer up.
They'd performed valiantly, hitting and running before they had been
pinned down and destroyed, but they'd destroyed five times their
weight in hardware in return and bought the navy precious time to
evacuate the base and get additional forces into the area to cover
the refugee convoys.
It
seemed appropriate then that he was her skipper. The Yris'ka'th
was Rear Admiral Amadeus White's flagship for the time being, most
likely not for more than a year. They'd passed all of their trials
and were busy with working up exercises while also planning their
first offensive expedition.
Hecate's
top slot had been taken over by former XO Lieutenant Gruber
who had been promoted to the rank of First Lieutenant in order to
take over the captain's position on the frigate. The Manta
class escort frigate had been outfitted, painted black, refueled, and
then sent on a perilous journey to scout the jump chain to Protodon.
She
had been replaced by a pair of newly constructed Horseshoe crab
class frigates on their first shakedown cruise. They had green crews
and untried ships. Hecate had an experienced crew which was
why they had been selected for the mission. Even her new XO
Lieutenant Riot was an old hand with the small ship's class.
The
frigate had orders to leave a chain of recon satellites in her wake.
They weren't carrying enough for each jump point, just 1 per star
system. There orders were to scout Protodon from outside the B-458
jump zone and then jump back and meet Admiral White's force in B-458.
The
Naga captain worried about his old ship and crew's mission as he
stood beside the Admiral. He coiled his tail and then rose on it up
off the deck and his legs to stand near the admiral's height. It
was difficult but worth the effort he thought. Such considerations
quickly left his mind as he focused on the frigate and her upcoming
scouting mission.
Along
with a better sensor package the small frigate had taken on extra
food, fuel, and atmo for the trip, stuffing every cubicle of the ship
and even storing containers on the hull. They still wouldn't have
enough fuel to make it back to Antigua though, it was a 1 way trip.
And
to take on that amount of extra mass something had to go. Some of
that mass would be dumped allowing them to pick up speed, but not
enough. She had sacrificed her external and internal ordinance. If
she got in a fight she would get chewed up or destroyed pretty
quickly. Not a pleasant thought.
Admiral
White seemed worried about sending in an untested crew with a new
captain. Captain Gruber had a lot to prove and that worried him as
much as his inexperience in the captain's chair did. Sometimes that
eagerness to prove oneself could be someone's undoing.
“Hassan
can handle the job admiral. I know it,” the Naga captain. “I've
trained him.
The
admiral turned to look at the Naga and then grunted. He didn't say
anything, just turned back to the view screen.
They
watched the ship spool up her hyperdrive and then jump silently. The
brief flash of light as the ship departed made the Neochimp grimace.
His fists tightened behind his back but he gave no other outward sign
of discomfort. That flash was a problem for the ship but hopefully
not a big one.
“Well,
that's that. They are on their way sir.”
The
chimp nodded as he turned back to work. “Then we'd better be soon.
No more last minute delays. If we can't bring it with us now we'll
leave it behind and it'll have to be shipped to us later. What are we
missing? Other than a lot more metal to back us up.”
“It's
in the pipeline sir. For now we'll do our best with what we've got,”
the Naga replied.
The
Neochimp eyed his new flag captain and then nodded slowly. “That we
will. So, let's be about it then,” he drawled. “We have a
rendezvous to keep. And some pirates to kill.”
“Aye
aye sir. Logistics is still in flux. But Commander Sprite has set up
another simulation with Lieutenant Fletcher sir. The intel is old but
it is all we have to go on until we get Hecate's data dump.”
“Understood.
Let's see what he's come up with.”
“Aye
sir. Any word on any more ships?”
“No,”
the neochimp heaved a sigh. “Your ship is the last we're going to
be assigned from Antigua before we move out.”
“I
was hoping admiral Irons would see fit to swap out a couple of the
pickets since they are making more steadily now.” That was true,
the yard was churning out a gunship every week, a corvette every 2
weeks, and a frigate every 4.
“I
was as well. But many of the ships still need a shake down to get the
bugs out. I'm also not thrilled about throwing green crews into
combat. No offense,” Amadeus stated looking at the Naga.
“None
taken. I've earned my spurs though in Destros and Mandolin sir.”
The
admiral nodded. Ssri'allth had been a young militia recruit barely
out of the larval stage of his initial life cycle when the gunship he
had been serving on had fought off pirates who had come into Destros
to prey on the swarms of refugees there. He'd served his ship and
captain well according to the records. They had went on to fight a
scrap in Mandolin with a Xeno scout six months later. His ship had
been battered but he'd survived and had been drafted by the navy
through then Lieutenant Vargess.
“I
know. That's why I requested you as my flag captain.” He didn't add
that he'd wanted Captain Vargess but Admiral Irons had been too
stingy to loose the other man's services. He had to admit the captain
was busy dividing his time between his ship and overseeing operations
in the star system. Running ops was tricky, he had to coordinate with
all the other departments to make certain everything ran smoothly.
There were already a lot of hiccups with the issues with the yard.
“To
think one damned virus could do this much damage,” he said, shaking
his head.
“Yes
sir. It's thrown our timetables into the sand storm,” the Naga
stated. “But one cannot plan too far ahead without running into the
god Murphy's meddling anyway,” he stated.
“True.
Too true. Okay, let's go see what Fletcher has set up for us. I'm
betting he cranked in the intel Firefly sent along about that
Cutlass so we'd better take the simulation seriously if we
want to get through it with our head and asses intact.” He
understood the need to train hard, to simulate worse case. But he
didn't want to scare his people too badly either. He was also
concerned that if they had too many bad dress rehearsals Irons would
call the whole thing off until they could get more ships. That was
the main reason he'd pushed to get Hecate out into space right
away. Now they were committed. “We'll do a hot wash after dinner.”
“Aye
aye admiral.”
---<>---<>---
They'll be fine,” Commander
Sprite said from the holotable behind him. Fleet Admiral John Henry
Irons turned to her avatar and then back to the screen he had been
watching. TF22 had just departed in a flash of light.
“They're running late. Three
days behind schedule.”
“That's because we had problems
with the logistics on our end. And the Marines needed a replacement
for Sergeant Snorkle. To get crushed like that by a falling
crate...His injuries couldn't have come at a worse time.”
“I know.”
“Captain Ssri'allth can handle
his ship,” Lieutenant Fletcher stated.
“I know. He's good otherwise
he'd never have taken her on. I'm not really worried about them.”
“Then what are you worried
about?” Protector asked. “I can tell from your vital signs that
you are concerned about something.”
The admiral exhaled slowly.
“Sindri. I'm grateful on the one hand that they pulled out all the
stops to build Yris'ka'th but on the other hand...” he
stopped and shrugged helplessly.
“You didn't like that they went
behind your back to do it? Chancing the schedule? There was some
slippage and some juggling of the convoys, but they did a damn good
job. That was quite an effort,” Sprite said.
“I know. They pulled out all the
stops to get that ship out of the dock. They played musical slips to
get her in and out and built. I know they wanted to time her
completion for when we were slated to return.” He smiled slightly.
“And damn near killed themselves
in the process,” Sprite observed. “Weren't they a bit put out
when we didn't return as planned.”
“The effort wasn't wasted,”
Lieutenant Fletcher stated.
“No, but we had several people
down for exhaustion, nine injuries, fortunately none fatal, and six
cases of brown out and 1 burn out. That's what I didn't like.”
The admiral said. He flicked a signal through his implants to shut
the screen off as he went to his chair. “We lost some experienced
people. We can't afford that. We can't kill ourselves like that and
get that sort of return.”
“But it was worth it to get the
ship.”
“Trading trained people for a
ship? I suppose so in some cold logic. But loosing them meant the
schedules were juggled all to hell. It ricocheted down the pipeline.
Fortunately Kinja and Sindri got a handle on it when they did.”
“You mean Vargess did. He caught
it early on.”
“Yes. He pulled their chestnuts
out of the fire. But you see what I mean though?”
“I see it in theory. This is
going to be a long campaign. Slow and steady like the turtle versus
the rabbit's sprint and then fool around. I think we need to find a
happier medium though,” Sprite said.
“Set the pace. We're going to
pick up the pace, that was what I was planning. Now people are leery
about it. Though they shouldn't be. They handled Yris'ka'th so
they should know they can handle it. Just not at such a breakneck
speed.”
“True. Which is why we have the
second tin can slip built and the third nearly finished. And you have
an appointment with Commander Wong and the destroyer pipeline
industrial complex. Which means,” Sprite heaved her equivalent of a
sigh. “I get to be unplugged. Again.”
“Looks that way,” the admiral
said with a shake of his head. He rubbed his jaw again and then
looked at the plot. TF22 would be all right. Amadeus knew his
business. He exhaled again and then stood. “Let's be about it,
shall we?”
---<>---<>---
13.9
weeks from her departure from Antigua Hecate jumped
into the outer reaches of the Protodon star system well short of the
B-458 jump point. Over ten million kilometers short, almost as if
they'd planned it that way Captain Gruber thought with a slight trace
of a smile of approval. It wasn't a perfect act of astronavigation,
he'd wanted to be a bit closer in, but it would do the captain
thought with a grudging nod of approval to the Neochimp navigator.
They needed to conserve as much fuel as possible for the trip home he
reminded himself. While they sat there they scouted the system from
afar with their eyes and ears, barely drifting in at less than 1kps.
“Good work nav, helm. Get some
rest,” the captain ordered to the helmswoman and navigator. Petty
officer second class Adel Shazam nodded wearily. She would most
likely barely sleep the first day. That would be rough but the stress
of wondering if they had been spotted would eat at her. Not that they
had to worry too much. By the time the enemy saw them and reacted
they would be on their way out. And if they did happen to come they
could always jump out long before they got within weapon's range.
“We have positive confirmation
of an enemy presence sir,” the communication's rating stated. He
held a hand to her ear.
“Don't you mean negative?” the
captain asked as he sipped at his coffee. He could see the plot
forming up. A few ships were there so he could see what Jimmy meant.
“Sir?”
“Never mind. What do you have
for me?”
Jim frowned and then seemed to
shrug the quip off. “We definitely have signs of occupation sir.
There is unrestricted chatter going between the planet and the ships
in orbit. We're picking it up. Some of it is encrypted but the
majority is not.”
“Why encrypt when they have the
planet? And that's just radio chatter right? Not laser?”
“No sir. We'd have to be closer
and in line of sight of the transmissions to get a look at that sir.”
“Go on Jim,” the captain
stated as he set his cup down in it's holder on his arm rest and came
over to the rating's station. He leaned over the man's shoulder.
Jim looked up to his boss and then
back to his number 1 screen. He pointed to the ships in orbit. “Sir,
at least two of these ships are transports, the small one and the
medium class Clydesdale here,” he said, flagging the two
ships. “There are two tin cans as well, possibly a third. There are
some smaller ship's, I haven't broken them down by class yet since
I've been focused on the planet. As you can see, several freighters
too. We're locking down the other ship types now.”
“Understood.”
“It seems that the transports
are in a different group than these ships sir. They are recent
arrivals. Something is going on, I'm not sure what.”
“A swap meet?” Adel asked from
the doorway. They turned to look at her. “You know, a spacer's swap
meet. Spacers get together and trade goods and stuff. Crews swap,
marriages, swap cargo and passengers, news, stuff like that.”
“Oh.”
“I don't know. I'm not sure...
it doesn't feel like that but I could be wrong,” Jim stated slowly.
“The freighters seemed to be paired up with the tin cans sir.”
“Oh?”
“Yes sir. I'm not sure why.”
“I think I do,” the captain
said straightening. The ratings turned to look expectantly at him.
“Remember that ship that got away? And it's partner the Cutlass
that Firefly took down?” He checked the front of his
turtleneck sweater for coffee stains. He hated wearing white, it
showed everything.
“You're saying these are raiding
pairs sir? Did we ever figure out what they are after?”
“Intelligence isn't saying.”
“If they even know,” Adel
murmured.
“Enough. Keep listening.” He
pointed to the helmswoman. “You go eat and rack out. That's an
order.”
“Aye aye sir,” the two ratings
said in unison. Jim snorted. Adel left. She seemed to dodge someone
and then kept going. The captain turned back to his half filled cup
and the plot.
They heard a throat clearing in
the open lock. The captain turned to see his XO and chief engineer
standing there. The XO indicated the chair and then tapped the
doorway meaningfully. The captain's stomach rumbled as if on cue. He
couldn't help but smile slightly. “Yes, right. Dinner. I'll check
in after supper then. Don't wait up on me,” he said. “You have
the bridge XO.”
“I have the bridge aye sir,”
the XO said as the captain left the bridge.
---<>---<>---
Very interesting. On your writing speed do you generally go at the same pace each day or are there some days you do a lot more. One of the authors I read knocks out 40-80 pages in a couple of days but then has several days in a row that it seems like (in their own words) that the forget how to work in the English language. Are you ever surprised by your characters. Like one you planned on only being a bit character suddenly turns in to a major character.
ReplyDeleteIt depends on what is going on around me. My average is 10 pages a day. If I get the 10 in I'm happy and will knock off around this time. (6pm my time) The most I've done in a day is 60 pages, but that was RAW. I'm serious, raw as in little to no formatting, little to no punctuation and absolutely no caps, spelling, etc. It took me a FULL 2 weeks to clean that mess up. I swore I'd never do THAT again. lol (and yet I still do in small doses from time to time)
DeleteI don't get writers block often. If I feel stumped I switch to another part, clean up something, or work on art or read a different book for a bit and then go back. Or I dive into another project until inspiration strikes. A few times I've gone and watched something mildly related on TV or a movie and that has helped.
I've learned that the best way through it is just that, through it. Bull through it or go around it and sneak up on the problem.
I resent it when I am on a hot streak and have to stop for something. I have frequently burnt dinner, forgotten the cat, etc. :) When I get rolling my hands are killing me when I'm done, I've got a headache and I'm strangely pooped. lol
When I do take an enforced leave of absence (for a family thing, groceries, doctors, etc) I sometimes find it hard to get back into the swing of things. Which makes me even more frustrated before and during the event. Right now the family is trying to get me to go on a cruise with them. They have been planning it for 2 years. I haven't been on vacation in 26 years and am not interested. Pass. My vacation is when they take off for a couple of weeks. (yes I am a grumpy hermit)
Characters: Yes and no. Some are planned, some evolve. Some I plan something and they just petter out and then make a comeback later. Some are minor throw away characters I come up with more material for down the road and they grow. I believe in the Ringo/Weber rule. No one is safe. Some unfortunately get killed though....
Sitrep update: I am on the last chapter of act 2. (chapter 22) Act 3 is brutally short (right now) I am both excited and dreading getting to it. But I am done for the evening. Time for ICE CREAM!
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ReplyDeleteWoot Woot!
ReplyDeleteI finished the first draft of BL Friday. I am tweaking things, adding a few things from the pile of notes I've got before I hand it off to the Betas. It is short, brutally short.
I wanted to work on the cover art but I am not sure how much rendering I will be able to do this week since it is in the mid 80's here. (That's not a dig at the Easterners like Minion Mike... oh wait, maybe it is! :D ) Have fun playing in the snow!
To be honest though, I hate the heat. I can't render if my room is above 72 and If it gets into the 80's you can forget writing! (Which is why it is one reason it is so hard to write in summer!)
ICE CREAM TIME! :D
What is brutally short? your things to add/tweak? Or BL itself? As in is it more of a novella than a novel?
DeleteBased on the vague standards in the industry I'd have to say it is a novel. But I don't really think of a novel as such unless it is over 300 pages. This is under 220 so far.
DeleteAs far as brutal... well, I'll have to let you be the judge of that. When you get a chance to read it...
True. I generally would say 240ish and up is a novel depending on formatting. There is nothing wrong with it being short so long as it is good. Sometimes the best things are short and to the point.
ReplyDeleteOn a side note have you ever thought about doing a short story from say Sprite's or Defender's point of view. Say waking up on Io11. We have Irons' pov in the novel. Listening to Sprite dig around in the network for the first time could be interesting.
The page count is slowly creeping up as I add little bits or scenes. :)
DeleteSprite: Interesting. I did have Sprite at the beginning and the end of a short story in MV 2. It is a VERY strange story.
I like the idea of seeing things through her eyes though. I'll have to check my story files. If I don't have something from her, Protector, or one of the other AI already on file I'll jot the idea down for later. Thanks. ;)
I'm a little confused with the rank system you use for your navy, I believe I've raised this before actually.. maybe a year ago. Can you make a post with the rank structure of the Marines & Navy? It's so unusual to be reading 'First Lieutenant' as a rank for the Navy, lol.
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